Before:
Fumbling my way across the slippery surface of the blipping and blobbing inflatable, I make my way over to the highest point, the mountain, the place where only few dared to go. Well not really. I slid down from the top, flipping and flailing my arms, until I split the surface of the water, getting deeper and deeper. I bob along the top of the turquoise water with my life jacket keeping me afloat.
During
Climbing back on, the obstacle doesn’t even flinch under my weight. I scramble up to the second highest point, and before I jump, I notice the faint shape of a navy blue starfish, creeping along the sandy floor, underneath the layers of crystal clear liquid. Pointing and shouting, I call for charlotte.
After:
Kaelyn your use of descriptive words really paints a picture in my mind
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