My First Draft

Maddy - Personality.

Bursting through the door every morning, she is always rearing to go. She is all over the place and will help you overcome some of your fears.  No matter how sad you are, she can always manage to make you smile. Joking around for hours, I’m sure she would never stop.

Because of her friendly personality, she is always there to greet you. Outgoing and stubborn, she will always go her own way. She is kind-hearted and will help you out whenever you need her. Somehow, every day, she convinces her dad to take her surfing. One way or another, she will make her dad give in. Maddy has her own unique personality and isn’t afraid to be herself.

Having a bubbly personality, she is full of ideas and always thinking ahead of time. She can be organised, but most of the time she just makes her life up as she goes. As she gets ready in the morning, she moans all the time, just because she wants to get going.

Revised Writing

Maddy - Personality.

Bursting through the door every morning, always rearing to go. She is all over the place and will help you overcome some of your fears.  No matter how sad you are, she can always manage to make you smile. Joking around for hours, I’m sure Maddy would never stop.

Because of her friendly personality, Maddy is always there to greet you. Outgoing and stubborn, she will always go her own way. She is kind-hearted and will help you out whenever you need her. Somehow, every day, Maddy convinces her dad to take her surfing. One way or another, she makes her dad give in. Maddy has her own unique personality and isn’t afraid to be herself.

Having a bubbly personality, Maddy is full of ideas and always thinking ahead of time. She can be organised, but most of the time she just makes her life up as she goes. As Maddy gets ready in the morning, she moans all the time, just because she wants to get going.