The Holidays are Too Short.
Dear Hekia Parata,
Don't you just love relaxing and not having to rush? Even thinking about being on a three week holiday would definitely be relaxing. I am writing to you because I definitely think the holidays are too short. Because of all the reasons I am about to tell you, in my opinion the holidays must be longer than two weeks.
Firstly children have not enough time to go and travel. This is because by the time they get to the place they want to go, they have to go home again. Otherwise they won’t make it to school in time. If you had a 3 week holiday you wouldn’t have to rush your traveling, you would have another whole week to get home and do anything you need to do. You could even go to more than one place! You would still have time to recover from your holiday too. Otherwise you might fall asleep in the middle of the first day back at school. Imagine that! So embarrassing! It feels like you almost need another holiday because you are way too tired that you can’t even think. All you want to do is have the holidays back. That last week would work perfectly as another holiday.
Secondly, if they were longer you could get all ready for the next term and you wouldn’t have to worry about it when you get to school after the holidays. There is nothing worse than getting to school and having nothing ready! How would you feel if you came home from travelling, and was all stressed because there was only one day left, and you just don't have time to get ready?
Another reason is that, some children have to do so many chores that they don't have any time to see friends and family. Imagine that! Everyone seeing their friends and family and your stuck doing heaps of chores. If we had a 3 week holiday we could at least have some fun because we would have more time. There would be plenty of time to visit your grandparents or friends and family.
The last reason is because if it rained or the weather was bad for ages, you would at least have a bit of time to go out and do some activities. Otherwise, if we had a 2 week holiday, we wouldn’t have any time to go outside and have fun or do anything. By the time the rain stops you have to go back to school!
I think the holidays should be longer because of all the reasons I have outlined above.
Yours Sincerely,
Kaelyn.
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ReplyDeleteYou writing is really good you have a conclusion, which summaries you main point and viewpont
ReplyDeleteI like your persuasive writing like at the start when you talked about relaxing.
ReplyDeleteI like your persuasive writing like at the start when you talked about relaxing.
ReplyDeleteI like your persuasive writing. Question who is Hekia Parata?
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I like your persuasive writing. Question who is Hekia Parata?
ReplyDeleteEvelyn
Hekia Parata is the Minister of Education.
DeleteA fantastic first attempt at persuasive writing, Kaelyn. My star for you is I really love how you have used such clever persuasive language throughout your entire piece of writing. My wish for you is to work on your conclusion. I think you can leave your audience with more than simply one line. Perhaps something to think about and truly convince them if they don't quite believe you?
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